Rough Cut 2

Doubt Rough Cut 2: from Jack Osman on Vimeo.

After our change of idea, here is our second rough cut. As you can there is a lot of changes to our video, not only have we finished the filming for the whole video, we havbe changed the verses to make a more narrative based video, which are interspersed with cut aways of the night before, flashbacks if you will. The next stage is to fine tune this video into our final cut, we want to change a few shots as well as edit the flashbacks to differentiate them from the main narrative. Our second rough cut was well received by Mrs. McCluckie. The change from Jack miming in the verses to more narrative based scenes was seen as a vast improvement. This rough cut however is by no means perfect, and we know that. Scenes Miss did pick up on include;

* The shots of the two of us holding hands reveals that it is a homosexual love affair too early on, due to the hair on my arm. Therefore that needs to be re-filmed.
* The scenes whereby Jack gets up to go to the bathroom and where he is getting dressed are too long and monotonous. We planned to rectify this by breaking these shots up with a variety of cuts, featuring the party or flashbacks.

In addition there are a few shots we don't personal like, and some of the editing needs tweaking, but apart from that it seems we are finally near the end of the process.