Showing posts with label critique. Show all posts
Showing posts with label critique. Show all posts

Tuesday, 2 March 2010

Rough Cut-Teacher Feedback

Doubt Rough Cut 1 from Jack Osman on Vimeo.



Here is our first rough cut, this is from our intiial filming shoots. After we edited the first verse and the first chorus we decided to show our teacher, unfortunately she did not like a lot of our footage and she found quite a few problems with our video. She disliked the party scenes and felt that our protagonist, Jack, was not a good enough actor. As well as this she disliked our lighting in certain areas as there was too many shadows (as you can see in the screen grab from our original edited footage). Therefore we spent a long period of the week rethinking our video and trying to develop the idea and make it more successful and more to the liking of our teacher.



After much deliberation we decided to scrap the verse footage we had, and look into a more narrative based music video. The main story of closet homosexuality and the unravelling at a party will stay but we will not use the idea of singing and lip-syncing. Jack is staying as our protagonist as we believe in him being the right look for our character plus we still have some footage we wish to keep.

The next stage was to organise a new shoot, which was arranged for Monday 1st March. With the ideas to film the narrative of the verses which runs like this, he would be waking up, after the party, early in the morning, confused about what has happened he looks around for signs of what happened that night, he sees clothes, condom wrappers and alcohol splayed across the bedroom floor and throughout this there will be small flashbacks to what was happening a few hours previous. All of the flashbacks are shot from the point of view of our antagonist, so as to hide there identity. The second verse would then be jacks escape from the bedroom then in to the bathroom where he would be washing himself constantly, trying to rid himself of what he feels like is dirt. The chorus will still be filled of the juxtapositional shots of the young jack and the older jack. while the bridge will be filled of jack trying to escape the house after coming downstairs and finding people from the previous nights party, ending in the unveiling of the mysterious partner from the night/party before. Throughout the video we will be following a motif of having animal masks across his bedroom, this is to confuse the viewer and Jack as he does not understand what they mean, until the end when we realise his partner was wearing one.

Thursday, 10 December 2009

First Response

After talking through our idea and avid discussions, we put forward the idea to our tutor. The presentation went well and was well taken by our tutor, the main response was that it had lots of potential as an idea. This really pleased us and we were thrilled to be able carry on developing it. The one thing that she made apparent to us was to really consider our setting, due to the fact that if it was the wrong place it would look shabby and not up to the standard we could really achieve. Now that has been made clear we have further discussed our options for setting, we felt that an average house would look to unprofessional and cause it to seem like the "convenient" and "cop-out" option. We got some options for houses that we thought we might use. [insert photo here and talk]

We spoke about our next steps, we have decided to properly think out how we will film the rest of our video, with all the various ideas we have thought about and put them down into one storyboard. Which will then most probably be made into an animatic.